1001+Flat+Tales

Joseph Baviello __The American dream__

There was a 12 year old boy named mike who woke up one day in the white house and soon realizes that the was the president of the united states .He told the people at the white house that he was not the president and that he was just a kid. They did not believe him but when he looked in the mirror he saw himself as a 38-year-old man. He asked them what year was it in and they said 2035. The vice president was his best friend josh who acted nicer then usual when he was 12 “probably because he was the president mike thought” , And his first lady was mike’s girlfriend Judy, and the secretary were some of his friends from school. Mr. president thanks to you we have solvled the energy crises josh said, O MY GOD! that is great mike said.All that hard work finally paid off josh said Then a few days later when he was starting to learn and enjoy his new job an emergency broadcast from the news sent to him explained that aliens were coming, Mike just laughed and said how dimb do you think I am? Mr. president this is no joke he explained that the aliens had landed in California and invaded it. Now thhere are coming to washington D.C. Mike still did not belive him until he saw fire coming from outside and people in his office panicing. Mike had no other choice he declared war. Mike recived information about the aliens, the aliens were big red crab like creatures that had big eyes, weapons, and human like bodies that had air helmets and legs. Mike had ordered in the military troops to attack them, for some reason josh could not be found. So Mike was looking for him and he found him in his office josh did not notice him when he took off a mask and had a alien face and speaking in a walkie talkie and saying “move in to the white house” it did not take long for Mike to realized that Josh was the alien king. He told everyone about Josh and he walked on the office and there was a big hole inthe wall, they found him but he took the first lady and with his alien powers climbed to the top of the white house. Mike ordered the general to send some helicopters to shoot Josh down but he destroyed all of the helicopters and he walked into the office and there was a big hole in the middle og the wall and fire on the out side of the white house.ordered more of the aliens to destroy the white house. and then he dropped Judy. Then the white house started shaking, and Mike fell and hit his head, and when it seemed like it was over he woke up and it was all a dream.

[2 days later]

After the war he discovered that the alien king was the vice president because he was jealous that he won the election. When he woke up and realized it was a dream, his friend called him and asked him to play and he said do you ever imagine what it would be like to be president of the United States? Then someone called him on his cell phone and said, “Are you ready Mr. president”?

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I don't think that your plot is original because it didn't seem to me that your story was interesting although it is creative but i just don't think it's interesting. I suggest to you that maybe add a little bit more of action and description to your plot. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The problems that the character faces is that when his 12 years old his young but then one night he dreams and then he wakes up and suddenly he realizes that his in the white house and then suddenly aliens come. I don't think that the there is a climax or a resolution. the things that I would change is everything.  3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I think that the characters are not enjoyable or likable because there's not much description. No you do not get any good sense of the because there is not much dialogue, description.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? The details in this story does not help me see or hear and experience the story, it does not give me any image in my head the details that i would like to see is more action and description!!!!

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think that he needs to improve a lot.